Pebbles

[Dee]

[Dee]

Step lightly when you walk on the shore
Lost in awe of the vastness of the sea

There might be little people sleeping under the pebbles
Hushed and lulled by the rolling waves
Wrapped in blankets of seaweed
Snuggled into the sand like memories

Rainbow fish scales clenched in their tiny fists
As humpback whales cry their sorrows in the deep
Their hearts are filled with songs of the ocean
Of the silver moon and how the world began

Step lightly when you walk on the shore
Lost in awe of the vastness of the sea

There might be little people sleeping under the pebbles
Hushed and lulled by the rolling waves
Wrapped in blankets of seaweed
Snuggled into the sand like memories

~ A.P.

[Moonchime]

I really enjoyed the gentleness of this poem and felt it rocked gently like the waves of the ocean in calm weather.
I particularly enjoyed the images created by these lines:

Wrapped in blankets of seaweed
Snuggled into the sand like memories

Their hearts are filled with songs of the ocean
Of the silver moon and how the world began

I also found the repetition made it more lyrical and created its own music. Lovely

[Dee]

Thank you Mz M... it's a reworking of a previous effort, I think it works better with the reduction, the repetition and the few changes.

It's a strange thing to go back to old pieces. Rarely am I satisfied. One could just constantly rewrite old material, but I guess we need to learn to draw the line somewhere and let things go or be.

Or rework.

[Lori]

I agree with Mz. M. What you write generally has a calming effect. Whimsy without schlock. A fresh view through your amazing eye on the simplest, yet really most important things. Always a fun ride, lady.

[Dee]

[Dee]

Mz NR has just found this picture of a tiny mermaid... this is incredibly close to what I imagined my little pebble people look like!




http://www.yoshimasa-tsuchiya.net/index.html

[NurseRatched]

Mz NR has just found this picture of a tiny mermaid... this is incredibly close to what I imagined my little pebble people look like!




http://www.yoshimasa-tsuchiya.net/index.html

OMG. Serendipity! I wandered in here by chance & I am completely charmed by your poem; in fact, I was visualizing this little mermaid amongst the pebbles! Again, I am completely in awe any time I read these original works. Not sure how you do it! Thank you

[Dee]

Thank you very muchly, NR...

I'm not entirely sure how these things come to life...I think often it is just actually sitting down to it, making time for it, - start writing and see what happens kinda thing.

[Lori]

How incredibly sweet. Isn't it wild that something like this is so soothing and dear?

[NurseRatched]

How incredibly sweet. Isn't it wild that something like this is so soothing and dear?

Truly-someone should hand these out at birth. Easier to navigate life clutching one of these humble angels

[Lori]

P.S. That is also how I'd envisioned the little spirits in your poem, Dee!